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100 Words: Too Good

“I’m going with my parents to meet the girl they want me to marry.” he said. Sheila’s head reeled. Wasn’t she the girl he wanted to marry? Hadn’t he told her that she was his soul-mate? She ranted, she raved, she pleaded but he went anyway. He met the girl and a few weeks later he married her. Sheila was heart-broken. She had lost her best friend and the man she thought was her partner for life. “Perhaps, I’m not good enough for him,” she thought.

Years later, she knows the truth. She was too good for him.

 

 

 

 

Inspired by Dawn Storey of Alphabet Salad, I’m undertaking an attempt at short fiction writing. 100 words – no more, no less. 

In keeping with the theme of Everyday Gyaan, I will also try to make sure that the fiction is something that attempts to inspire. I would love to hear what you think of my first attempt. Be honest now 😉

May you be inspired – every day!

 

 

56 Comments

  1. Rahul Miglani Rahul Miglani May 30, 2012

    too good !!! 100 words can do wonders !
    you have great talent

  2. Sanjib Saha Sanjib Saha May 25, 2012

    Hello Corinne
    This is my first visit to your blog, and the first thing that i liked ( loved ) about your blog is the name itself (Everyday Gyaan). Being an Indian, i am really felt good and overjoyed. Nice to see some foreigner getting inspired by Sanskrit. Next comes the concept- 100 words! Really great! Awesome ! Well let me go through the other articles in your blog.
    Sanjib

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 25, 2012

      Hi Sanjib – Thanks for dropping by. I’m glad you liked Everyday Gyaan. However, I must tell you I’m 100% ‘desi’!

      • Sanjib Saha Sanjib Saha May 25, 2012

        Haha 🙂 You have awesome grasp over Hindi!! Desi girl.!! have you visited India anytime?

          • Sanjib Saha Sanjib Saha May 26, 2012

            Oh Corine!! i missed that !!! You are real desi!!! (Ye janke bohat acchha laga) Its really nice to know that!!

  3. Sunita Sunita May 23, 2012

    loved it. Loved all the other 100 words too. it has inspired me to write at least a page everyday again.

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 23, 2012

      Thanks, Sunita. I’m glad I inspired you. I hope I can get to see your writing – do share.

  4. Jan Neel Jan Neel May 22, 2012

    I didn’t read all the comments, just the story, just so you know. I loved the story, I know nothing of writing so I can’t critic your style or wrongs and rights, I just loved the story….<3 Sad and triumphant, perfect. all in 100 words.

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 23, 2012

      Jan, I’m glad that this story touched you. I’m writing to touch and not to impress. Love you ♥

  5. Leila Campos Leila Campos May 21, 2012

    As the Aussies say – Good onya mate. I was disappointed when I read the last bit. I wanted to know how and why she reached that conclusion. So you see your mini story gripped my attention. Sign of a good story! More stories welcome.

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 21, 2012

      Thanks so much, Leila. I guess I’ll have to fill up all the parts in between sometime later. For now, I’ll stick to my 100 words – my first attempt at fiction. I’m anywhere are good as you are at writing – now I hope you got that not so subtle hint!

  6. Galen Pearl Galen Pearl May 21, 2012

    I agree with others–this is fabulous. In so few words you captured a great story and a deep self revelation. Terrific!

  7. Sondra Crane Sondra Crane May 20, 2012

    It was great. Said it all in a very concise way. Wish I could do as well, but I do my best and thats important to me. Great work

  8. Myrna Myrna May 20, 2012

    This is really good Corinne. I like that you were able to tell a little story, but infuse an important message into it. You’re a clever thinker.

    I like flash fiction. I tend to write brief, concise stories. That’s sort of how I communicate verbally too I think. I’m glad it’s an accepted art form now.

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      Thank you, Myrna. You do flash fiction so well. I’m so enjoying this – it’s kind of addictive!

  9. Nikky44 Nikky44 May 20, 2012

    This is a perfect story Corrine. I loved it. I should have read that 16 years ago 🙁

  10. Leah Leah May 20, 2012

    Corinne, you painted such a vivid picture in so few words. I see the one left behind, her love tossed in the trash like an empty pizza box. She’s full of the intimate times spent with this man. How could he leave? She’s hurt and angry, her world has been rocked. He obediently rides off into the sunset to marry a stranger. He’s turned his back on himself—his life, and the woman who truly loves him. The reader sees much more than 100 words here. Well done!

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      Oh, Leah now you’ve gone and done my next 100 words 😉 Just kidding, you captured it so well.

  11. Sulekha Rawat Sulekha Rawat May 20, 2012

    Absolutely right, she was too good for him. Great story idea, love it.

  12. Everyday Gyaan Everyday Gyaan May 20, 2012

    Thank you, Amy, Linda, Privy and Melissa. ♥

  13. Linda Lee Linda Lee May 20, 2012

    Corinne Rodrigues:

  14. Dangerous Linda Dangerous Linda May 20, 2012

    a few more years (or decades…) later i bet she realizes that neither one is better than the other, they simply weren’t right for each other. i think sometimes we need to experience extreme swings in judgement before finally settling somewhere in the middle ;-*

    you captured an amazing amount of meaning in very few words — well done!

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      Perhaps she hasn’t got there yet, Linda 😉 Glad you liked it though.

  15. jimi ann jimi ann May 20, 2012

    I love it, Corinne! I wish it was 10,o00 words, because I’d love to hear more of the details. It drew me in.

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      All of you are encouraging me to continue this story, Jimi Ann and I hope to in the near future. Till then you’ll have to suffer my other offerings 😉

  16. melissa melissa May 20, 2012

    I realized that 100 words is too short but if your theme is as good as yours, then it could create waves and impact. Loved it BS 🙂

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      I would like to continue this story someday, Melissa. It was just a start. Glad you liked it.

  17. Claire 'Word by Word' Claire 'Word by Word' May 20, 2012

    Excellent.

    I would like to suggest that replacing ‘knows the truth’ with realises, but then again, this is also a character statement, and those two options point towards quite different characters, so I guess it depends on your intention – but isn’t it amazing how just a few words can do that. 🙂

    Keep going!

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      Thanks so much, Claire. I think ‘realizes’ would indeed have been a better option. I appreciate your feedback.

  18. femmefrugality femmefrugality May 20, 2012

    Agreed with everyone else…100 words is hard, and you did a great job! It did leave me wanting more, though 🙂

  19. Martha Orlando Martha Orlando May 19, 2012

    Wow! Following such a tight formula isn’t easy, but you’ve done a brilliant job here, Corinne. What a great story! <3

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      Actually the one crib that my English Litt teacher had was that I write too briefly, Martha. So I guess it’s easier for me. Thank you for your encouragement. It means a lot coming from an excellent story-teller like you.

  20. privytrifles privytrifles May 19, 2012

    It was a brilliant attempt and it has left me asking for more. I was like No….it cannot just get over so soon. I want to read more…. and I am already imagining various possibilities that could have happened 🙂

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      Thank you, Privy. I hope to write more of this story in time. Meanwhile, there’ll be others!

  21. Dawn Storey Dawn Storey May 19, 2012

    Heartbreaking, yet empowering! Thanks for sharing this, Corinne – and I’m glad I inspired you to tackle 100 Words! Looking forward to your further gems. 🙂

  22. Facebook Page Facebook Page May 19, 2012

    Fabulous!!! loved it.

  23. Amy Amy May 19, 2012

    honestly… it is fabulous! I want to know MORE…. loved it. I think no mater what the subject is, it will be in line with Everyday Gyaan… because after all to think, feel, anticipate or to believe is to be inspired or inspires! It is one of the things I love about reading… about fiction ~it evokes emotion and thought! Now you’ve got me wondering what happened to him? what happened to her?

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      Thank you so much, Amy. Your comments always make my day. I love fiction too, but never ventured to write it. Now I’m trying it in small doses and it’s getting addictive. I think I’ll continue this story some day.

    • Corinne Rodrigues Corinne Rodrigues May 20, 2012

      I’m sorry you didn’t, Magali. It’s just a story of rejection and lack of self-esteem and then finding one’s worth again.

      • Magali Magali May 20, 2012

        You don’t have to apologize, Corrine! I’m a little slow sometimes… it makes sense now.

  24. Janaki Nagaraj Janaki Nagaraj May 19, 2012

    Too good.

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