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The Shadow Of Your Smile

 

My dearest love

I stood on the platform waving to you until your train was a speck in the horizon. I was so sad at your leaving but proud of your decision. I was filled with hope too.

I have asked the doctor to give you this when you come back. Those long years of addiction have taken their toll on me. You would not go if you knew how far gone I was. But I wanted you to get a chance at rehab.

Stay sober and keep smiling. I go in peace, taking with me the shadow of your smile.

 Yours always.

 

 

Written in response to the 100 Words On Saturday prompt on Write Tribe.

 

100 Words on Saturday - Write Tribe

 

 

 

 

30 Comments

  1. vishalbheeroo vishalbheeroo July 28, 2013

    Hi Corinne,
    It’s such simple yet heart-warming story. I could connect with the unique touch and beauty of the story.
    Cheerz
    Vishal

  2. Diana Pinto Diana Pinto July 25, 2013

    Addiction of any kind can be so destructive. Going to the rehab before its too late is the wisest decision. Loved the take on your prompt Corinne.

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | August 1, 2013

      Yes, so glad they made good choices, Diana. Not everyone does!

  3. Damyanti Damyanti July 25, 2013

    Loved that last line! Thanks for creating this event, I’ve been enjoying it.

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | August 1, 2013

      Thanks, Damyanti. Loved your post. Looking forward to seeing your 55er! 🙂

  4. Vidya Sury Vidya Sury July 24, 2013

    I could visualize that. And my eyes filled up for no reason. What a pleasure it is to read everyone’s take on this particular prompt, isn’t it? 😀

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | August 1, 2013

      Actually, I just realized this came from watching some intervention shows!

  5. afshan afshan July 24, 2013

    I remembered a movie when a man loves a woman ! anyway hitting rehabs is challenging
    good one

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | July 24, 2013

      Was that the Andy Garcia movie, Afshan. It was a great one.

  6. Sheethal Sheethal July 24, 2013

    A sensitive topic written so lightly!

  7. Suzy Suzy July 24, 2013

    Very tenderly written. Letting go is a hard thing to do but sometimes necessary.

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | July 24, 2013

      Yes, I was thinking of how hard it is for addicts to let go, when we find it so difficult.

  8. Bhavya Bhavya July 24, 2013

    At least one of them is saved, thankfully or else it would have ended on a sad note!
    This story, it’s creative, unique and lovely. Truly… 🙂

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | July 24, 2013

      Oh yes, I tried to keep the hope in there too, Bhavya. Thanks. 🙂

  9. Sulekha Sulekha July 23, 2013

    What a beautiful story! your creativity is contagious and I am waiting to come up with something different for my next challenge.

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | July 23, 2013

      And that’s a great compliment, Sulekha – thanks so much. Looking forward to reading your post.

  10. Cathy Graham Cathy Graham July 23, 2013

    Great use of the prompt and word count. Sad, poignant but with a touch of hope there, too. Enjoyed it very much.

  11. Shilpa Garg Shilpa Garg July 23, 2013

    I simply loved the plot you have chosen for this story, Corinne. Very creative and different!
    Very intense and touching!

    • CorinneRodrigues CorinneRodrigues Post author | July 23, 2013

      Thanks, Shilpa. I’m not sure where it came from! 😛

  12. Kajal Kajal July 23, 2013

    Nice one there 🙂 seriously, lots to learn! 🙂

  13. Pixie Pixie July 23, 2013

    Aww! 🙁
    poignant! and so sad and kind of happy as well..

  14. Kalpana Solsi Kalpana Solsi July 23, 2013

    What a beautiful story. You have touched a very sensitive topic. Lots to learn from you.

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